How to Write a Powerful Elevator Pitch
One of the most common questions when meeting someone new is “What do you do for work?”
This is just general chit-chat for most people but for anyone who is an entrepreneur, there is an added twist.
Depending on what we do, the answer to that question could mean a new customer or business partner or not.
We can’t be sure if what we offer is going to be of benefit to the other person, but if we can frame it in the right way, there is the greatest possibility of them really hearing us with an open mind.
What makes the difference between this scenario playing out beautifully vs. brutally?The key to getting good at this is an exercise in crafting a compelling Elevator Pitch.
The Elevator Pitch
One of the best ways to ensure that question is answered well is to practice what you could say and have a number of versions of what to say. This is commonly referred to as an Elevator Pitch.
The idea with an Elevator Pitch is to be able to communicate what it is that you do clearly and concisely enough that if you were on an elevator, you would be able to give them a strong impression of what you do before they got to their floor.
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How to Write a Compelling Elevator Pitch
There are three key areas that I like to focus on when writing an Elevator Pitch:
Meaningful and Relevant to the Person
Clear and Concise
Communicated with Emotion
Being Relevant and Meaningful
This is the single most important area to focus on. It’s useful to ask yourself in all of your marketing and presenting “Why should they care?” If you answer that question first and uncover what’s in it for the other person you are on the right track.
Benefits over Features
It’s really easy to go on about all of the features of what it is that we offer, but it’s a huge mistake to lead with this. Instead focus on how what you do benefits others. Remember, someone who buys a drill doesn’t really want a drill, they want holes. The drill is just a device that enables them to get what it is that they really want.
It’s important to keep things in balance and not just be going on about all of the benefits without covering some features that allow these benefits. You have probably heard the expression “Sell the sizzle, not the steak”. This is true as long as the person gets the steak.
Ask Great Questions
It’s almost impossible to know what matters most to someone unless you know more about them. Ask questions to find problems that what you offer could help them solve. If you can offer a solution to help someone with a pain they know that they have, you shift from someone trying to sell something to a friend and advisor.
How to be Clear and Concise
Practice writing Twitter style “Sound Bytes” about what you do. Cover different aspects of what it is that you do and come up with a 140 character or less sound byte for each. Keep going and practice, practice, practice.
How to Communicate with More Emotion
Any time we communicate with others about what we do, it’s essential to be in a strong state and emotionally engaged with the person and with what it is that we offer. By focusing on what we love most about what we do as well as how it feels to help others with what we do, it makes it easier to be more connected and empathetic towards them.
A good practice in state management is to sit and get yourself into a bored and tired, low energy state. Once you are there focus on your business, how much you love it and the stories of everyone who you have helped already.
Then get to that bored and tired state.
Now focus on all that you have done and focus into the future and imagine all of those people who you haven’t met yet who will have their lives changed by you and keep expanding. Make your vision as full and big as you can.
That’s what you should bring to people. Neither you nor they deserve any less. You never know how what you can help a person and by mastering these three areas, they will be the most open to what you have to say.
The Elevator Pitch Exercise
1. Write down what you have been telling people in answer to “What do you do?” (In 30 seconds or less)
2. Write the most dry and sterile version of what you do. (30 seconds or less)
3. Use everything that was covered in this post and make the most powerful and compelling elevator pitch that you can. Once you have one great version, write another to address a different type of person with a different need. (Each version should be 30 seconds or less).
Keep Practicing and this will get easier and easier and you will have a larger number of standy Elevator Pitches to draw from.
To your massive impact!
Paul Reimers
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Great post Paul. These days brand building is about a whole lot more than simply crafting a tag line or 30 second pitch … it’s all about creating a compelling story.
Thanks Marty,
I totally agree. The challenge is to have a concise story that will be meaningful to the person who it is shared with.
Drug companies have the best ads. Bar-none. They make me want to buy pills and make me think that it’s O.K. to develop blood clots or cancer after taking their pill. lol This is horrible.
But we can learn from them. There are key things that we can take form this. It’s emotion is key. Telling someone how our company has impacted our lives can be the one of the best ways ‘inside’ and that can actually draw them in to what we have to offer.
Great post!
Thanks for your comment Brock,
I agree, it’s unfortunate what can come about through the excess usage of prescription drugs. It’s all about taking the best of what works and find out why it works, even if it is working for a cause we don’t support.
I first heard of an elevator speech three years ago when I started my business. It took me a while; however, I had finally created one and felt wonderful about it. I was finished! Not. I learned later that I should create not just one but have a few different approaches that I could can use depending on the situation I was in.
I resisted writing one for a while but now I realize that the possibilities for networking while waiting for something to happen are endless. Of course, I do not want to miss an opportunity that could be just the one that opens the right door for me.
Good point Rachel,
I like to think of it as blues and jazz musicians to about improvising. They have a good number of tried and true “riffs” that they they know work that they can pull out in the moment and create something new to fit the situation.
Hello Paul
Creating and using the elevator speech is one of the most magnetic ways of attracting people to you. It lets people know how what you do, helps other people. Your practice for communicating with emotion is a key point when using an elevator speech. The elevator speech give new meaning to the 3 foot rule.
Thanks
Perry A Davis Jr
Music City
Hey Perry,
I’m glad that you mentioned the 3 foot rule. By having a number of great elevator pitches ready it can allow us to feel more confident and actually reach out to engage those people around us.
we have so little time when we answer the question of what we do that we want to encourage curiosity and questions from those we speak to. I’ve heard some great elevator pitches which draw you into a conversation even if continued at a later time.
Excellent point Anne,
It’s always concise but in most cases is a strong initial contact and a beginning that will be hopefully continued for a later time.
Gooday Paul,
I would say Network Marketing is all about building relationships. The Elevator speech is a great way to get interest. For me in every initial contact, we are looking for creating intrigue. Like a mystery novel if you can get those you contact wanting to know who did the dead without revealing the outcome, you are on your way to building a large prospect list.
An elevator speech is a great way to achieve this!
Great comment John,
I love your analogy of a mystery novel. It’s all about creating interest and not satisfying curiosity.
Hi Paul
I think the best part of the elevator speech is showing your enthusiasm. If you love what you are selling, it will naturally come out.
So many people need the elevator speech training. It is difficult to capture someone’s attention in a short span of time, but the points you mentioned will help them.
I totally agree Donna,
Enthusiasm is an essential aspect of this. I think a good balance emotionally is to be enthusiastic about what you have to share as well as connected to and interested in the other person.
This post is so informative, tips of elevator pitch is so useful in business marketing and this is a great help to me. I am thankful that I stumble to your post and looking forward to read more from you.
Firstly, the term Elevator Pitch in itself is misleading. You shouldn’t be pitching anyone, ever. It’s so last century. And, besides, for the most part people rarely talk in a elevator.
With that said, sharing with another what you do must be all the things that you said, clear and concise, benefit driven, emotional and conversational.
My wife and I practice asking each other what we do and listening to the response. The more often we do it in dress rehearsal the better we’re going to be when we meet someone face to face and it is our turn to engage them in a conversation about what we do.
Thanks, once again, for a thought provoking post.
RICK
I agree Rick,
I dislike the term “pitch” but “elevator pitch” is how it is commonly referred to (which rarely happens in an elevator) so it’s the wording I used.
It’s great that you practice with your wife. Having a partner to practice with that you have a deep connection with is a great way to get the empathy and reciprocity to be second nature when talking to others.
Oh man,
I’ve always struggled with this process. I’m going to make sure that this is my strong point going forward because it’s so crucial in today’s economy to be on point and stand out in a crowd!!
Thank you
Hi Paul,
Great post. Explaining to people succinctly what we do is one of the keys to conveying the belief that you have in your business.
Hi Paul
I love the idea that you practice what to say so it comes out natural…. pitching is probably the wrong word to use…. but you do need to share something with new people so that they wish to continue to discuss what you have to offer at some point.
Its kind of like keywords for search engines…. I guess a pitch is kind of a long tail keyword… something that will attract attention and get you a second meeting.
I remember when I was coached on interviewing technique, I was encouraged to develop “accomplishment” statements. So that I could use them in interview situations – they work!
Thanks for the post… happy to share
Best wishes
Pete
Hi Paul:
This is a great post. A lot of people do not realize how important it is to be able to tell what they do in 30 seconds. Like you clearly said mastering how to tell what you do in 30 seconds could mean new business for you if done right.
Now, I kind of slightly disagree with Rick above. Just because it is called elevator pitch does not always mean it has to be told in an elevator. It probably used to be so years ago. Today your elevator pitch or speech could be one you tell in a bus or train stop just before the bus or train arrives. It could be one you tell in those networking events where you get 30 to 60 seconds to introduce your business.
I think the problem with most people in direct sales or MLM is that they have been crippled by three way calls. Most people will freeze asked to tell what they do in 30 seconds unless they can pull out a cell phone and have their upline say it. The good news is that blog’s like this definitely offer lots of training and anyone can learn how to effectively market their business if they spend more time reading your blog posts.
Great suggestions for creating an elevator speech Paul. I’ve found it’s much better to say something I’ve thought of by myself and feel comfortable with. At first, I tried copying someone else’s and it sounded awful (of course:-)
Thanks for sharing all your ideas Paul. Regards from Julieanne
Paul,
Nice video. The example about Steve Jobs and the iPad is a great one. 1,000 songs in your pocket! That tells the whole story. They can find out out the wheel on the iPad to select the songs and stuff later. The important thing is that people want the songs! They want the Benefits, NOT the features. I also like the part about selling or having a message with emotion! That part is easy to forget but so important. The drug companies are another example that you gave of commercials that use the emotion evoked by the healthy, happy person to sell their product that has lots of crippling side effects!
Thanks,
Jupiter Jim
Awesome post Paul. This is something that I have to work on myself. You have laid out some very useful action steps to take and you’ve made it clear that this is something that’s very important to get down. Thanks for sharing.
This is a nice video..It is great suggestion for those who are creating elevator speech..You had a great ideas..Thanks a lot for sharing this.
Hi Paul,
Wow, It is an excellent post on writing powerful elevator pitch.The video is very informative and you well explained each points and this post is helpful for many readers.Thanks for sharing!
Hi Paul,
Great tutorial.You explained the topic in a very simple way which is very easy to understand and follow.I like your writing because you explained each points very beautifully.Thanks for taking time to write this post.
Paul-
I think that a lot of people don’t teach things like elevator speeches anymore, I don’t know why, maybe they think it is old school marketing, but it is something that is definitely needed. So I am glad you wrote this post, it is very thorough. One of the most important points you made was to practice, practice, practice. You can’t make it sound rehearsed or rigid, people won’t go for that.
Great post!
Tony Tate
Hi Paul,
This is what I am looking for! Entrepreneurs must know how to use his words to give impact to someone he’s talking to. It’s like sales talk but you’re not actually selling. You just keep your listener interested in everything you say. Thanks for this Paul!
Hi Paul, This is great info on how to grab someone’s attention with a powerful one liner. On an “elevator” we only have a few seconds to compel them to want to hear more. You have given fantastic information on how to figure out what to say in a couple of seconds! Thanks so much!
Lynn
It’s a great exercise to practice, Paul. Not only on the elevator, either.
In internet marketing, whether you’re writing a compelling squeeze page, the first paragraph of your blog, an email to your list of followers or even uploading a video… you MUST engage people with proof of your relevance to their needs, and with sincere empathy within the first 7 seconds of your delivery. Market research shows that this is the amount of time you have to convince them that they should read on.
As you say, keep your delivery to a Twitter post length. Great idea!
Paul,
All of your suggestions are great. The one that stands out for me is to “communicate with emotion.” You can have the best combination of words to describe how your work can transform another person’s life, but you need to add a strong emotion to it, your excitement, enthusiasm and expression that you truly believe what you are saying and will stand behind your words.
Warmly,
Dr. Erica
Paul,
you have exposed a simple truth on answering that magic question…what do you do?
I agree, to explain it simple and keep in on a great content base and not script. Being yourself and so that excitement in how you help others generate extra income while taking little time from their lives. Compared to a company and all the tools with products. Making it as comfortable and focused on the person your speaking with.
Learn about them and share what you do and how it will help them.
Paul, your a great mentor in our industry and I love your tutorial. Keep us updated on this great communication method.
Paul,
Great posting!
Couple things…
1.) Everything we learn about Main Stream marketing is almost always wrong. The problem with those “advertising” strategies and companies is… they would rather “look cool” than actually sell a product.
2.) Most main stream advertisements focus on what they do and why they are so good.
In the book “Start With Why” by Simon Sinek, he talks about this thing called a “Golden Circle” where you approach with your Why first.
Now in most cases, people wouldn’t know how to identify their why, so there’s a whole education and learning in the process. But the reason Simon suggests this is because it taps into the inner most depths in our brain to the subconscious.
This is what gives us the connection in why we buy. We buy because of why someone does what they do more than what it is.
When it comes to your elevator pitch, yes… it could be attached to the prospects wants, needs, and desires… but when delivering it… lead with your Why.
Do a quick google search or YouTube search to find his video = mind blown!
Talk soon.
-Dereck
I’ve never heard about elevator pitch. I’m glad and I found this valuable and useful site. This is a very big help for me. Thank you PAUL.
Hey Paul,
Great post and thank you very much for your tips! I was actually very good in asking question and communicating with emotion when I was in the insurance industry but ever since I left the industry and came out on my own, I started to be more humble and not applying such powerful method anymore especially in my speech. There are 2 things I can tell the difference through my experience
a) When I am doing offline business dealing with people I know and through their recommendations, I get very good results even though I am humble and do not use strong words to move them into thinking or agree with me. Basically, I think people judge you on what you have and own…that is in my county.
b) When I do online business, I always want to remember to be humble and not using powerful words to ask question and guess what happened ?? Most people really want to take me with them so that I can be successful
So, you see the difference ?
I think elevator pitch is needed on certain area in the marketing process. Just my opinion, Paul
Thank you very much for sharing and I appreciate your great explanation. It will certainly help me in many ways whenever I want to sharpen my skill
Cheers
Pearly
Hey Paul,
Great post and thank you very much for your tips! I was actually very good in asking question and communicating with emotion when I was in the insurance industry but ever since I left the industry and came out on my own, I started to be more humble and not applying such powerful method anymore especially in my speech. There are 2 things I can tell the difference through my experience
a) When I am doing offline business dealing with people I know and through their recommendations, I get very good results even though I am humble and do not use strong words to move them into thinking or agree with me. Basically, I think people judge you on what you have and own…that is in my county.
b) When I do online business, I always want to remember to be humble and not using powerful words to ask question and guess what happened ?? Most people really want to take me with them so that I can be successful
So, you see the difference ?
I think elevator pitch is needed on certain area in the marketing process. Just my opinion, Paul
Thank you very much for sharing and I appreciate your great explanation. It will certainly help me in many ways
Cheers
Pearly
Paul, I think this is such an important thing for people to think about, learn and continually practice. Networking, online and off is hugely important and if done correctly can earn you a lot of great business. And it often all starts with your elevator pitch.
I think your comment about asking questions is key instead of just puking the wonders of you and your product/service on people. People love to talk about themselves and then they come away with a good and memorable experience, instead of just another business card to throw in the pile to collect dust.
Hi Paul,
The Elevator Pitch …. yes this is a very useful icebreaker when you first meet a new person.
It is important to let the contact know that …. if they are looking … that you do have a solution to their financial needs.
Thanks for sharing this and explaining it so well.
Cheers
Bryan
Thanks for posting this, Paul!
This is the kind of amazing and refreshing tidbit taught by one of my favourite mentors, Tom ‘Big Al’ Schreiter. And I know he’s not the only one.
When we keep it short and concise, and tailor made for the person we are speaking to, then we give value to that person, and s/he is more likely to be interested in what we’re saying.
Willena Flewelling
Hi Paul
Thanks for this great info you give out and
help, What you share is very important ,
i think if you can do it in 30 sec flat and get a
person to ask you more Question then you become a master.
Aksing question is the best to show the person it is not about you but about them and people fell away better if you
asg question about them and how you can help them.
Great Video also.
Best
regards
Theuns
Hi Paul,
Great tutorial,Looking forward for more informative posts.Thanks for sharing!
Hi, Paul. I really liked your article. I am so emotional person that from time to time it is hear to be communicated with. I know that I have to put some boundaries but you know how hard that is. You encourage me though to try harder. Thank you:)
I think if you can do it in 30 sec flat and get a person to ask you more Question then you become a master. |
Hi Paul, great post! A powerful elevator pitch is a great tool for marketing. It’s also important to be as truthful as possible because you don’t want to lose customers by being dubbed as a scam when they don’t get the results they expected. I also agree with your point on focusing on the benefit of your service/product. It should be about how you can give them a solution to an existing problem or how it can alleviate an area in their life that needs improvement. Thank you for sharing.
I remember helping a client a couple years ago with their company that they wanted to get more seed money. They were a startup at the time and the project needed a couple people and more resources.
I coached them through putting together an elevator pitch and went as far as connecting them with a few different contacts of mine that were long time readers…and had money and did invest in startups from time to time.
It is important to be clear, confident, and informative about your business. Answering the who, what, where, and why are exactly what people want to know. If they are still confused in your short pitch, you failed.
My big suggestion is that when you do put your pitch together.. seek out a peer who is successful and ask if they can give you feedback.